Wow, I can’t imagine how much time it must have taken to create this video, but I can really feel the book-love going on here. Nice!
We can take these beats, which are basically the beats of your outline, and if the words “and then” belong between those beats, you’re fucked, basically. You’ve got something pretty boring. What should happen between every beat you’ve written down is either the word “therefore” or “but.” … It should be “this happens, and THEREFORE this happens, BUT this happens, THEREFORE this happens.”